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Old 08-04-2014, 03:14 AM
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This is so amazing! \(^o^)/
You should definitely finish it!
I loved your past stories too.
You're so good at writing! Do you want to write for a career? :3

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Old 08-04-2014, 03:28 AM
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Your writing has improved so much since the last time I read one of your stories, I'm intrigued for what's next xD
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@HoneyBanana30 - Thanks so much! I'm not sure if I want to become a author. Maybe, maybe not.

@Ashleighsinger4 - Thanks again! That means so much to me. I'm intrigued to see what happens next too.. I haven't even planned all of the story yet!

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Your writing is so amazing. :3
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I love this! ^^
I can't wait too see what happens next!
Your writing is so amazing. :3
Thank you so much!!
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This sounds awesome so far and you're really improving! I'd like to give you some suggestions so you can improve even more in your writing.

When writing a story, remember to stay in the same tense (if it's past, then you should stay in past.)
When saying she said/whispered. ect, do not follow it by an adjective , instead use another word (said angrily=snapped). (P.S.Never feel shy to use said often!)
If you are telling the story in a character's point of view, then the story must follow the character's personality and knowledge. ( for example, at the beginning of your story, it says ' her hands' Drew already knows Zara, so this scene should have been introduced as ' Zara's hands' . Many authors also suggest not to hide character's identity's, unless they're unknown villains or people who are not important)
If you have any more questions just ask! Can't wait for chapter two!
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Old 08-07-2014, 09:56 AM
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Anyone like the new chapter? :-)
I'm probably gonna post the third chapter tomorrow or the weekend.
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